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Read the following passage, which contains a shift in tone:

"In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Lexington, the city council must set aside more funding for old folks' homes. It's super uncool to ignore a totally big part of our community."

Which of the following revisions best corrects the shift in tone and maintains a formal style throughout?

A. In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Lexington, the city council must set aside more funding for elderly housing. Dissing a totally big part of our community is problematic.

B. In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Lexington, the city council must set aside more funding for elderly housing. It is unfair to ignore a large segment of our community.

C. You don't have to be Captain Obvious to realize the Lexington City Council should set aside more funding for elderly housing. It is unfair to ignore the well-being of a large segment of our community.

D. You don't have to be an expert in local politics to realize the Lexington City Council should set aside more funding for elderly housing. It's super uncool to ignore a totally big part of our community.



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Final answer:

The revised sentence effectively corrects the tone shift in the passage, maintaining a formal style while addressing the funding needs for elderly housing in the community.


Explanation:

Revision:

In order to meet the demands of the growing elderly population here in Lexington, the city council must set aside more funding for elderly housing. It is unfair to ignore a large segment of our community.

Explanation:

  • Tone Shift: The revised sentence maintains a formal tone throughout, addressing the issue respectfully and professionally.
  • Professional Style: The revision eliminates informal language like 'super uncool' and maintains a more sophisticated language suitable for formal communication.
  • Clarity: The revision conveys the message effectively without compromising the seriousness of the issue.

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